The article about Reyhaneh Fathien visiting Iran is more effective than the article over Soltan dying due to its details, point of view, and structure. The article about Reyhaneh Fathien is more descriptive and is told from a point of view that makes it seem as if your in her shoes, also her use of appeals and tone also gives you a sense of excitement and attracts you in while the article about Soltan dying isn’t very descriptive and very general, lacking the use of appeals and a very boring tone due to its formatting and structure.
In the article about Reyhaneh Fathien the details are very easy to point out as they are bolded. Most people think of how dangerous and exotic it may be to be living and roaming the streets of Iran but “Iran isn’t that dangerous”[Fathieh 10] Rehaneh claims which is very hard to believe and “hard to sell”[Fathieh 10]. Also due to the war that’s going on between America and Iran most people would think that the two countries hate each other and people from that country but that’s not the case due to the “Average Iranians not hating Americans” [Fathieh 15]. Iranian people look up to America and “Never stop complimenting America”[Fathieh 15] as “Prison Break and Lost are water-cooler conversation and Angelina Jolie and Enrique Iglesias are cultural staples”[Fathieh 15]. When people hear the word Iran they usually think of camels riding through the Streets and people dressed in turbans while the city is very dirty and smelly but “Iran isn’t a desert wasteland” [Fathieh 15]. You “Rarely get to see sightings of Turbans and head-to-toe burqa’s” which is kind of a shock since most people would expect to see them everywhere. Iran also isn’t polluted and has “All the conveniences of modern life such as taxis, starbucks-like cafes, and air conditioned malls” [Fathieh 15].
In the article about Soltan dying the details are non existent as the words used are very boring and undescriptive. Using words such as “Lying on the ground as blood flows from her mouth and nose and onlookers scream” [AP Archive] give the reader know prior knowledge pertaining to the fact that she got shot in the face, even the average 6th grader could know that when you get shot in the face that is what’s going to happen and how you’ll look. Also saying that “A bullet hit her heart and lung, and maybe 5 or 6 minutes later, she died” [AP Archive] give the reader no sense of imagery or descriptiveness.
In the article about Rehaneh Fathieh the story is told from her point of view. She provides facts and details and puts you in her mind. Talking about how “when the Iranian customs officer came to stamp my passport, I was floating in fantasies of getting kidnapped and winning a Pulitzer Prize” [Fathieh 15] gives you a sense of her emotions and feelings.
In the article about Solton dying the story is told by a narrator. The story being told by the narrator takes away a lot of sense of how people are actually feeling. Instead of actually seeing the thoughts and emotions of Makan we have the narrator saying things such as “He said he had asker her not to go out for fear she would be arrested or shot”[AP Archive] when the true story could have been that he begged her not to go out and she refused, we also don’t know the exact words of what he said or the emotions he was feeling. The narrator telling the story takes all that away.
In the article about Rehaneh Fathieh the story is structured in chronological order. Rehaneh Fathieh talks about events in the order of which they had happened. She starts off talking about how when the “U.S. embassy in Tehran took Americans hostage she hadn’t been born, than when she was 12 she moved to America, than she shared her plans to travel to Iran in the summer, after that she found out that it wasn’t that dangerous, than she discovered that Average Iranians didn’t hate Americans, and than she found out how clean it was” [Fathieh 15]. When events are structured in chronological order the passage flows by smoothly and is easier for the reader to understand what is going on. It doesn’t have the reader guessing about what happened first or what place there at in the passage. The passage is also in story formatting and is broken down in to paragraphs pertaining to each particular event.
In the article about Soltan dying the events aren’t in chronological order and skip between two major things. The story begins talking about how “Soltan is lying on the ground dead” [AP Archive] and than skips to how “sultan and Makan met” [AP Archive] and goes back and forth between the two. The passage is broken down into separate sentences and isn’t in story form. This makes it difficult for the reader to read as a whole.
The article about Reyhaneh Fathieh uses better use of details, point of view, and structure making it more effective than the article about Soltan dying. Most readers would choose the article about Rehaneh Fathieh due to those uses.
In the article about Reyhaneh Fathien the details are very easy to point out as they are bolded. Most people think of how dangerous and exotic it may be to be living and roaming the streets of Iran but “Iran isn’t that dangerous”[Fathieh 10] Rehaneh claims which is very hard to believe and “hard to sell”[Fathieh 10]. Also due to the war that’s going on between America and Iran most people would think that the two countries hate each other and people from that country but that’s not the case due to the “Average Iranians not hating Americans” [Fathieh 15]. Iranian people look up to America and “Never stop complimenting America”[Fathieh 15] as “Prison Break and Lost are water-cooler conversation and Angelina Jolie and Enrique Iglesias are cultural staples”[Fathieh 15]. When people hear the word Iran they usually think of camels riding through the Streets and people dressed in turbans while the city is very dirty and smelly but “Iran isn’t a desert wasteland” [Fathieh 15]. You “Rarely get to see sightings of Turbans and head-to-toe burqa’s” which is kind of a shock since most people would expect to see them everywhere. Iran also isn’t polluted and has “All the conveniences of modern life such as taxis, starbucks-like cafes, and air conditioned malls” [Fathieh 15].
In the article about Soltan dying the details are non existent as the words used are very boring and undescriptive. Using words such as “Lying on the ground as blood flows from her mouth and nose and onlookers scream” [AP Archive] give the reader know prior knowledge pertaining to the fact that she got shot in the face, even the average 6th grader could know that when you get shot in the face that is what’s going to happen and how you’ll look. Also saying that “A bullet hit her heart and lung, and maybe 5 or 6 minutes later, she died” [AP Archive] give the reader no sense of imagery or descriptiveness.
In the article about Rehaneh Fathieh the story is told from her point of view. She provides facts and details and puts you in her mind. Talking about how “when the Iranian customs officer came to stamp my passport, I was floating in fantasies of getting kidnapped and winning a Pulitzer Prize” [Fathieh 15] gives you a sense of her emotions and feelings.
In the article about Solton dying the story is told by a narrator. The story being told by the narrator takes away a lot of sense of how people are actually feeling. Instead of actually seeing the thoughts and emotions of Makan we have the narrator saying things such as “He said he had asker her not to go out for fear she would be arrested or shot”[AP Archive] when the true story could have been that he begged her not to go out and she refused, we also don’t know the exact words of what he said or the emotions he was feeling. The narrator telling the story takes all that away.
In the article about Rehaneh Fathieh the story is structured in chronological order. Rehaneh Fathieh talks about events in the order of which they had happened. She starts off talking about how when the “U.S. embassy in Tehran took Americans hostage she hadn’t been born, than when she was 12 she moved to America, than she shared her plans to travel to Iran in the summer, after that she found out that it wasn’t that dangerous, than she discovered that Average Iranians didn’t hate Americans, and than she found out how clean it was” [Fathieh 15]. When events are structured in chronological order the passage flows by smoothly and is easier for the reader to understand what is going on. It doesn’t have the reader guessing about what happened first or what place there at in the passage. The passage is also in story formatting and is broken down in to paragraphs pertaining to each particular event.
In the article about Soltan dying the events aren’t in chronological order and skip between two major things. The story begins talking about how “Soltan is lying on the ground dead” [AP Archive] and than skips to how “sultan and Makan met” [AP Archive] and goes back and forth between the two. The passage is broken down into separate sentences and isn’t in story form. This makes it difficult for the reader to read as a whole.
The article about Reyhaneh Fathieh uses better use of details, point of view, and structure making it more effective than the article about Soltan dying. Most readers would choose the article about Rehaneh Fathieh due to those uses.
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